Before we went fishing, we had a little feast with delicious fish and chips. We had a safety talk about hitting people with hooks because hooks are very sharp. When I went to the wharf, I saw people panicking because their bait catchers sailed away. I heard people moaning and I heard splashes. I was so furious from fishing because I caught nothing and my bait catcher floated away. Then I felt happy again by watching people fishing. I smelt a disgusting smell from the bait. It smelt like rotten socks. I couldn't believe that I was going fishing for the first time. I was blasted with excitement. When we got back to school, I felt happy because that was the first time I went fishing.
2 comments:
Well done, Muatau. The bait is smelly but usually the fish love it and will take the bait - but not on Thursday!
You have used excellent words to 'hook in your reader' Muatau. I liked the words "panicking; furious; disgusting; blasted with excitement'. You are a very clever writer Muatau
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