Thursday, September 9, 2010

AN ENORMOUS ADVENTURE - A Narrative by Jayden

Happiness filled the room, when suddenly....a bang as loud as a stampede broke the solid wooden door. Purple burst into the terrified room. “I won an adventure to earth! This is marvellous!” He yelled excitedly.

Purple waited in the spaceship. He wondered where to go, “Africa or Madagascar?” He questioned. The spaceship stopped at the space station. Pinky Peculiar jogged into Purple's spaceship. “Hi Purple Petrified.” She said happily. Pinky and Purple chose to go to Africa. They waited on the ship as the ship took off...

Purple yawned, “That was a long journey."
“Yeah that was amazing!” Pinky muttered. They nervously stepped out of the ship. It was a beautiful and enormous land. They saw the Cheetahs, Zebras, Elephants, Giraffes and Rhinos. The temperature was cool and the land was wonderful. They waited quietly and patiently thinking of something to do.

“ROAR!!!” They screamed and ran away. They ran and turned their heads and froze stunned like they were paralysed. “Huh?” They whispered. “Haha! We were scared of a lion cub!” They laughed. Suddenly, a Lion jumped out of the bushes and it was the cub's dad. “ROAR! ROAR! ROAR!!!!!”
“AAAHH! lets get out of here!” They screamed and ran away from the hungry lion. Suddenly they heard the click of a trigger and a bang like a bomb. The Lion got shot and fell over. The Lion cub cuddled his father. Pinky and Purple felt sorry for the lions and picked them up. They shouted “Hunters, Hunters, hunters!”

They ran into a cave.  In the cave they saw Nurse Bear. “I will help you.”  She said in a brave voice. “It will take a few weeks for the Lion to recover from his wound."  
“Thank you, Thank You.” Pinky and Purple said with relief.  They acted like the Bear was a Queen.

A few weeks later... The Lion had healed and said gratefully, “Thank you aliens."

By Jayden (9 years old)


kara said...

Hello room 8!
I am visiting a new school next week and was thinking how great it was spending time with you earlier this year so I thought I would say a quick hello! I hope you are all having a great year so far and looking forward to the school holidays which are just around the corner!!!
I have been looking over all your blogging lately and wow fantastic work on all your work so far room 8! Cant wait to see the up and coming!
Jayden and Cypress, I love your narratives! You both look like you have been working hard at movie making which look awesome, you're both naturals in front of the camera, watch out shortland street!=D Great work, keep up with your excellent reading and writing
skills =D
Keep up all the great work room 8 and have a fabulous time during your school holidays=D
All the best,
from Miss Coster
p.s - Hello Miss Hansell =D

Mrs Anderson said...

What an awesome story Jayden! You are a very talented author. I love reading the stories you write as you try very hard to include all the new things you learn. Don't forget to ask Miss Hansell to email me a copy of this for our exemplar folder :)

From Mrs Anderson

Darwin said...

this story is amazing Jayden!!!

from Darwin

danisha said...

wow jayden what an amazing narrative story what will be your next goal to be

from danisha