Friday, November 11, 2011

Mavis Describes Her Beautiful Place

Far beyond the exhausted sun... a paradise comes alive! The sun hulas across the island to capture the essence of paradise.

Mysterious, rare creatures dart around the island desperately, looking for anything crunchy to munch on. Water trickles down the water fall, like tears collapsing onto a pillow of candy floss. Light winds swoop the leaves off their feet and dance under the banana-shaped sun.

An immense flavour oozes between my teeth tempting me to dream. A mountain of divine raspberry fruit, melts blissfully in my mouth. What a sweet taste! Tears of white chocolate dive down dramatically from the blank blue sky shimmering like diamonds under the oven-like sun . Beautiful blue candy floss bounces in between brazillian butterflies causing them to splutter in surprise.

An exotic, fragrant smell of banana leaves fizz under my nose like fireworks. Sea water pushes small parcels of their strong smell into the weak air. The smell of a Samoan umu flutters across the island. Tongan meals being prepared by gum gum bears are already nearly running out. The smell of a Maori hangi hangs above my head making me lick my lips.

My eyes flutter with excitement as coconuts fall down like crazy.My veins giggle with excitement. Frosty air dances like a bunch of hooligans. Velvet pieces of cake served into my hands by grape-coloured ice creams.

White polar bears sing goodnight. Day throws in night as if controlled by a flick of a switch.Fire cackles aways into the night.

Under the moon light glow, lays my paradise...sound asleep.

1 comment:

Miss Kyla said...

Mavis, I love your use of alliteration to keep the reader hooked in your writing. You have an amazing imagination! Your beautiful place seems like an exciting place.

Your VERY proud teacher,
Miss Kyla